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Thursday, March 23, 2006

Jason~ March 23, 2006

I had several feelings running through me while I was reading this. First I was wondering why you were so worried about the phone ringing. I just could not figure out why that was in the story…I’m still wondering about it, but it adds a different touch. I was confused at some points probably just because I do not play computer games. At the end things became suspenseful. I got that on the edge of your seat feeling as the game got more intense. I thought your detail was amazing and sounds very realistic.

I don’t feel like this narrative has a lesson at the moment. Right now it sounds like a teenager feeding his gaming addiction. This could be part of the message, but I hope not all of it. I am not clear as to what you are getting at. Your first paper was about violence and you only touched on the graphic parts of the game for a paragraph or so. I guess if you are trying to make violence your main theme you would want to describe more about what happens in the game.

I believe it was your detail that kept me interested. I have never played computer games so all the details you gave really helped me understand what was going on. Even the little things like telling me what key made the character move were helpful. It was easier to slip into your story with you. Your sentences vary. Some are short and to the point while other are very long and detailed. Therefore I did not get bored. There might be a few places where you were a little wordy, but I personally liked it. I would not recommend adding too much to what you have. Just continue your story.

This story is definitely a personal narrative. The use of “I” is a dead give away. You are reflecting on an experience that you have already encountered. We see conflict in the game you are playing and how hard you are working to stay alive. There is also suspense in that situation. The thing about the phone ringing that is suspenseful and seems like it might be a conflict at some point too. I do no think that you have reached your climax yet.

You and the character you are playing are the only ones in this story so far. Both introductions were specific and detailed. You set us up with this situation that most can relate to. You are just getting home from school, wanting to mellow out before doing work. This helps make you someone we can trust. We know that since you are a student like us we have something in common. You also described every part of what you were going on the game, so anyone who has every played would know what was going on. Plus those of us who have not played we can try and understand what is going on.

At the moment this is all one event except for the phone ringing that comes from a past event. That is a secret that you have that we know nothing about. So the story takes place in the course of an afternoon/evening after school. You tell the story of what seems like a typical gamer playing his game. The phone ringing is intertwined throughout the story. I’m interested in seeing where that is going. I think the story flows well. I want to see what happens next.

Your paper thus far seems well organized and written. I like the detail that you give. I am a little worried that if you continue on with this amount of detail that your paper could get long and even boring. So just keep that in mind as you continue. I also would like to see more about the violence in here. It seemed like that would be a key part of your story. AND WHY ARE WE WAITING FOR THE PHONE TO RING!?!? Good luck!!

Emily Hawkins

Tuesday, March 21, 2006

William Shakespeare has written many sonnets. In Sonnet LV he speaks of a beloved. The poem examines life everlasting. Shakespeare has said that since he is writing this poem about a beloved she will never die. The writings that he is producing will last much longer than anything else on earth. He makes many distinct comparisons to what will survive and what will not. In the end Shakespeare still believes that his beloved will live on. There will always be proof of her in the poem. Shakespeare uses one of his sonnets to prove this theory to all readers, throughout all time.

Shakespeare has written an English sonnet, also known as a Shakespearean Sonnet. The English sonnet follows the rhyme scheme of ABAB CDCD EFEF GG. The first and third lines rhyme while the second and fourth lines rhyme for each section. Then there is a final couplet at the end of the sonnet. There are many poetical techniques within this poem also. Shakespeare has added endstops, enjambments and caesuras to the poem to create dramatic effects.

Monday, March 20, 2006

STILL WORKING ON GETTING THE BLOGS FROM THURSDAY MARCH 16TH- 19TH COMPLETED.

Thoughts on my paper:

Start with description of the setting

Place

Time

What the room looks like

Who is in there

Etc.

Talk about Christina:

Who is she

What does she do

What kind of personality does she have

Background information

Talk about life at home with Grace

How she was raised

What do they do for entertainment

Describe time after they get home from work/ school

Look at Christina from the role of a teacher

What reactions does she have to her students

Can she tell a difference in their behavior

What kind of things are mimicked

Does she talk to the parents about what she sees television doing to the students

Does her job affect her role as a mother…influences etc

Pull this information together so that both sides as a mother and teacher are exposed.

Plan for interview over spring break!

Wednesday, March 15, 2006

Biographic Narrative:

The absent narrator makes the narrative feel almost like a story. It gives a good feeling to “A Life Revealed”. The narrator had to rely on others contributions to the story. We really don’t know how the woman felt when she saw her picture, but we know the expression on her face and the actions she made because the narrator sees these things. The writer of this story was conveying a type of reunion. The photographer and the girl in the picture never really met until this trip. The author/ narrator had to use descriptive words to give justice to the reunion. Things had to be written with detail. This author went back to the original story to help set the context for us. She showed the hunt for the girl and what things were like some 20 years later.

Personal Narrative:

The narrator for “High Anxiety” is a young woman with an inconsistent job and a life going down hill. She wants more, she is just having a hard time finding it. Until she decides to climb Mt. Kili. When she started her story she made it so others could relate to it. She wants to sleep in and find a job she enjoys- something most young people want to do. She talks about relationships with her family, yet another way to relate to the reader. This story is not in chronological order. It starts with her feeling gross because she has not showered in 10 days then goes back to her life before the hike. She takes us through her lows and builds us up to her highs. A message from this story would clearly be that you can accomplish anything you want. This girl set goals for herself and worked hard to achieve them. This author shares a lot. (…)

Tuesday, March 14, 2006

The information discussed above is information that every parent needs to

become familiar with. Many of them know these things and choose not to listen, or make

adjustments. There are many articles and books around that can help educate parents on

smart television viewing for their children. Taking the tips given by the experts is the best

way to ensure that your child is using their television time to educate themselves.

Children need guidance when it comes to viewing television. Parents need to give them

that guidance. Therefore, parents need to stay educated in what their child is watching.

Parents are also faced with the fact that they let their children watch television, even

though they know it is unhealthy for them. Many see the television as a babysitter. They

can leave their kids there while they tend to other household tasks. This is not a

responsible thing to do. How do you know what your children are watching? A

suggestion would be to watch with your kids. This means you will be there to explain any

questions or things that they do not understand to them. This will also give you the

opportunity to engage your children in questions later. Asking them what they like about

the program, and what the program was about gives parents and children the chance to

talk, and learn from each other. Another tactic that parents need to be informed about is

network commercials and advertisements. These are things that parents should be

discussing with their children. They need to educate children about the products they are

seeing, especially if the child really wants one. But this issue should not just be left up to

the parents. What are the networks doing about it? Most of them are targeting the young

children age group. Letting your child watch public programming is a healthy alternative.

Most of these programs have sponsors but the advertisements for the products are few

and far between. All of these factors are things that parents need to be thinking about

before they let their children watch television. If the parents are educated then the

children will be educated too.

Monday, March 13, 2006

New Intro
There is a special community of people who work with children. Each individual has an effect on these children. Many who are working with children include parents, teachers and care-givers. This group of people need to be educated on the effects that television has on children. Basically, there are two sides to this situation. One side being that general television programs are not healthy for children to view. The other side is that educational programs are good for children to watch in moderation. Within these two sides are even bigger issues that need to be addressed. Ways to educate parents about good viewing habits for their children, why do parents let their children view excessive amounts of television if they know it is unhealthy and what part is the network playing in this issue, are all important questions to ask. These are the issues we are dealing with to help children get the most out of their television viewing experience.

Old Intro

Teachers and educators are very important in today’s society. They lead young people, and give them a chance to make something of themselves. This group of people also includes those who work with children, child care center workers, babysitters, volunteers;
anyone who has a chance to work with kids, is going to be impacting these children’s lives. When one is working with kids they need to be educated. They should know how to best approach a child and different techniques for dealing with them. In readings it has
been stated that children are affected by the amounts and what kind of television they are watching. There are some good advantages to children watching television. Many programs that are out are designed to teach kids, so they are not only watching television
they are learning their ABCs also. However, there are also downfalls to children watching television. Some believe that obesity, behavioral problems, self-esteem issues, over exposures to inappropriate sexual activities and prone to be violent are all outcomes
from children watching television. This community has an issue that it needs to deal with. Teachers need to know how to best teach, and understand their students. If a child does not react well to television then maybe a teacher would not use those types of methods in
their teaching. But this works the other way too. If children understand things better by watching an educational show then teachers should use them. Teachers would better able to help their students if they know the needs that they have.

Sunday, March 12, 2006

Style Lesson 4~
This section was all about characters. The characters or even subjects of our sentences. The goal is to make sure that all sentences have a character. We learned that if our sentences lack a character it makes it harder for our readers to read and understand. Also when our sentences lack characters it leaves the interpretation up to the reader, so the reader may read a sentence one way, while the writer meant it a different way. So it is very important to have characters in our sentences.

The selection also talked about passive and active voice. These writing terms do not mean the same as they do in other situations. We learned that it is okay to write in the passive voice. Although most prefer the active. The passive voice is used in situations when the active voice does not feel right. The passive voice helps portray different feelings. Sometimes these feelings are what a writer needs to get the reaction they need from their reader. We also learn about compound noun phrase. This being when you have several nouns stacked one after the other. The book recommends reworking your sentences to avoid this situation. It makes your sentences more understandable to your readers.

The last point that was made was about professional voice. People that are writing professionally tend to adopt a certain voice. But sometimes this voice is not realistic when it comes to readers understanding the point. The goal here is to take that professional voice and make it clearer so that almost anyone can read and understand. This may be done in several steps like the writer did as an example. Take the complicated prose, and make it clearer for a certain group. And then take the clearer version and write it so even more people will understand.

Saturday, March 11, 2006

DO NOT READ IF YOU HAVE NOT SEEN ELIZABETHTOWN AND PLAN ON SEEING IT!!!!!!!

Tonight the movie of choice was Elizabethtown. I picked it up from Blockbuster for $4.23 and the guy forgot to give me my change, so I had to wait for him to fix it. My sister put it in the DVD player in the family and we all sat and watched. After seeing the previews it was nothing like I expected. And right now I’m not sure if that is good or bad at the moment. Orlando Bloome is the main character. At the very beginning we are introduced to his pathetic life. He has just cost a major shoe company 1 billion dollars. The product he designed was recalled, with a problem, which we never find out about. He gets fired. So at home he is all depressed and then gets a phone call from his sister. His father has had a heart attack and died. He spends the rest of the movie trying to organize his father’s funeral in a Elizabethtown. Oh yea and he meets Kristen Dunst. Who pretty much starts out as an annoyance and turns into something more. He spends hours on the phone with her. She shows up in Elizabethtown and makes everything “OK”. The movie is weird at some points. So weird that I don’t think I can explain it. Orlando spends a lot of time feeling sorry for himself. The audience is given many of his thoughts. I think I expected more from the movie. It just needs more. More comedy, more romance, more of something. The relationship that Orlando has with Kristen is disjointed. They spend most of their time talking about how they would never work and too much time saying goodbye. Of course in the end it all works out. Their relationship is not continual. And really it is not based on anything. The first time they meet Orlando seems extremely annoyed by her presence. Then 12 hours later they are falling in love. Part of my really wants to like this movie. I want to be able to recommend it to other people. I just don’t think I can do that. The worst part is that I can’t give you a good reason not to watch it. The only reason would be that I have already told you everything that happens in the movie. I think there is a lack of sincerity in the movie. I can not connect with Orlando and his pain. It just does not seem real. It did not make me want to grab a box of tissues and cry along with him. Therefore I have to say that this is not the best movie in the world. I am surprised that it was sold out the last time I went to the video store. I feel like I need to watch a good movie not to make up for Elizabethtown.

Friday, March 10, 2006

I have put quite a bit of work into my paper this work. I feel better about the information that I already had in it. I also recognize that I still have a lot of work to do. With a busy weekend I hope everything gets done. Since I am home this weekend I was hoping to stop by the Richmond Library Downtown. Most of my sources have been articles and things found online. I was hoping that the library would have some information that would help. So that is pretty much where I stand with my paper.

I am sitting here in my room with my laptop in my lap. The television is on GAC channel 70 and I am mostly just listening to it. Except for the couple of times I have looked up to see who was singing. I am taking in all the things that are in my room. Trust me there are a lot of things in here. Every time I come home on a break I try to clean it but it never seems to all get done. There are boxes of my summer clothes sitting in a corner. They need to go in the attic but by the time that happens it will be time to bring them out. My notebooks and textbooks from last semester are all over the place. I have yet to find the perfect place to put them. I keep saying I will make room on my book case for them. Maybe one of these days. Then there is my St. Bernard calendar hanging above my desk. It is still on the month of February. I really should get up and change it but it’s almost not worth it. As I look at my desk I can’t believe that I ever did work there. It is packed with papers, money, cds, letters, and my picture printer. There might be a small corner that is open. The music has stopped playing on the television and some commercial is on trying to sell someone’s new cd. This brings my eyes over to my dresser. This dresser used to belong to my great- grandmother (I think). It is pretty. For as long as I can remember it has been in my room. This past Christmas my mom and dad gave me a jewelry box. I have placed that on one side of the dresser, so you can still see the mirror. The box is wonderful. It opens at the top and has places for earrings and rings and it has a mirror. Then the sides both open out for your necklaces. There are four drawers down the middle front. Each drawer is different inside. There are so many compartments, it’s almost hard to keep up with. Among jewelry box are other boxes, a money jar, make- up galore, and a value pack of gum. On each side of there mirror are Randolph- Macon pom- poms and Mardi Gras beads that I got from a Girl Scout function. My mirror is decorated with pictures of friends and important pieces of information. All of these things are stuck between the mirror and the frame. So sometimes they fall and I find them months later and have to find a new place for them. I have senior pictures of all my close friends up there and a couple of postcards. I realized a while ago that I had more pictures of my friend from church (a guy) than my ex boyfriends adorned up there. I thought that was interesting. As I continue to look around there are a couple of things that really catch my eye. My Friends DVD collection is sitting below my television on the stand. That probably stands out because I now have all ten of them and they are each a different color. There are also several stuffed animals laying around. One came from my best friend. She had a pig with the beanie pieces inside of it. I absolutely loved it so she told me I could pig sit. Her name is piggly wiggly and she is pink with white feet. I like her a lot. There are two animals that I got for graduation. One is a black bear with a hat and diploma. The other is Winnie the Pooh in a cap and gown. I also have two or three Winnie the Pooh animals on my toy chest. One I got several years ago, just because. The other my friend Christopher gave me while we were in Disney World. Oh how I love Pooh! That is the gist of my room. There is lots of chaos but I know where everything is!

Wish me luck on my paper!

Thursday, March 09, 2006

"Summary:The Effects of Television." Changing the Channels. Changing the Channels. 22 Feb. 2006 .

This article looks at the impacts the television has on children. It breaks up each section to expand on the topics. These topics include media violence, portrayals of sexual exploitation and attitudes, impact on self- image, vulgarity and rudeness, intense and disturbing imagery, and passive watching- the couch potato syndrome. This article comments that many of these topics do overlap, and so do the solutions for helping your kids. The article gives brief explanations of each topic. A reader then has the option of going further and looking at each topic more in depth. Something I need to do, as part of continuing the research.

"Television's Impact on Kids." Media Awareness Network. 2006. Media Awareness

Network. 26 Feb. 2004 .

This article explains televisions impact on children. The article provides information to parents of ways to help their kids understand what they are watching. But it also informs parents that this might be hard to children to grasp. It looks at what children go through when they view violence on television. The article explains that television has major effects on children’s learning and developing stages. The last topic covered is sexual content. They explain that most television shows contain sexual content, yet they do not promote a message about safe or responsible sex. This leaves children and teenagers to form wrong opinions about these times of situations.

“Research on the Effects of Media Violence.” Media Awareness Network. 2006. Media

Awareness Network. 22 Feb. 2006 .

This article refers to the fact that many studies have been done on how media violence affects children, and to each study is a different conclusion. So some argue that media violence will cause more aggressive behavior in children, but what is media violence? How does one measure too much media violence? The article then gives several reports about what researchers are saying. Does media violence simulate aggressive behavior in children at a younger age? All topics of violence on television and how it affects children are discussed within this article.

Childhood Television- Viewing Habits Grow Up and Out. (Making News). Idea Fitness

Journal 3.2 (Feb 2006): p16(1). (249 words) From Expanded Academics ASAP.

This article states the problems with children watching television. It includes some statistics on how much children actually watch. This article alludes to the fact that watching too much television could cause obesity amongst children. The American Academy of Pediatrics then presents parents with pointers on how to control their children’s viewing habits. Including steps like removing televisions from children’s rooms and encouraging other, active play.

Wednesday, March 08, 2006

Violence-

“The average American child will witness 200,000 violent acts on television by age 18”

(Gavin, How TV Affects Your Children). Does this scare anyone? Having children view

this outrageous amount of violent acts on television has to have some sort of affect on

them. Children are encouraged to imitate some of these violent acts. After they see it

enough on television they begin to think that they can copy these moves, and in return get

what they want. After all what do we expect when we constantly show someone being

robed, or a bully in school getting their way, without consequences? The violence being

shown a television is also making some kids believe that the world is not safe for them to

live in. (Gavin, How TV Affects Your Children) In agreement with this information

another article reports, “…media violence makes our kids more aggressive, less patient,

and more fearful of the world around them.” (Summary: The Effects of Television). So

with all this information provided, is it still ok for children to be watching television? If

so what are they really getting out of it?

Obesity-

Most children have taken to watching television and playing video games instead of

being active. They spend their time in front of the television instead of outside playing.

Most parents try to set viewing limits for their children to avoid this situation. However it

does not always work. Children find ways to watch television instead of getting up and

being active. “Several studies have documented that even benign television content

decreases children’s creativity and imagination, decreases physical activity, increases

obesity” (Summary: The Effects of Television). Society is growing a generation of couch

potatoes. We give television to our children and stop encouraging them to be active,

causing them to gain weight and even become obese. Some physicians have suggested

that taking televisions out of children’s bedrooms would help some of this problem.

(Gavin, Most Children Exposed to Violent TV at Least Once a Week). Parents must

involve themselves to keep their children from becoming obese.

EDITED!!!

Obesity-

Most children have taken to watching television and playing video games instead of being active like playing outside. Many parents try to set viewing limits for their children to avoid a sedentary lifestyle, however, this does not always work. A thirty minute program can easily turn into an hour and a half of “passive television watching.” (FIND SOURCE) With the busy lifestyles that so many families entertain, children easily find ways to watch television. Parents find it to be less work to sit their children in front of the television, than it is to watch them play outside. Having to keep an eye on a child while they are playing on the swing set requires the parents to be more involved. Many parents will admit to you that they use television like a babysitter so they can get other things done. It is all a matter of convenience. The article Summary: The Effects of Television states, “Several studies have documented that even benign television content decreases children’s creativity and imagination, decreases physical activity, increases obesity”. Society is growing into a generation of couch potatoes. We give televisions to our children and stop encouraging them to be active. As we see studies have proven that this causes weight gain and even puts children at risk for obesity. Some physicians have suggested that taking televisions out of children’s bedrooms would help solve part of this problem. (FIND SOURCE) Parents must involve themselves to keep their children from becoming obese. Children learn from their parents, so if they are setting inactive examples, you can not expect much better from the children.

Violence-

“The average American child will witness 200,000 violent acts on television by age 18” (Gavin, How TV Affects Your Children). Does this statistic scare anyone? When you break this number down it is about 11,000 violent acts witnessed a year. When children view this outrageous number of violent acts a year we expect it to affect them, and it does. Children may be encouraged to imitate some of these violent acts, especially when they are in a situation where they can not distinguish between reality and fiction. If children continue to see a certain move from the Power Rangers over and over, they may start to believe that it is okay to copy this move. When in reality they could seriously hurt someone or even themselves. We show these violent acts on television and expect our children to not be effected. However, they are being affected; we are encouraging children to follow what they see on television. Parents need to discuss what their children are viewing with them. This can help separate television programs from reality in a child’s mind. The violence being shown on television is also making some kids believe that the world is not safe for them to live in (Gavin, How TV Affects Your Children). In agreement with this information another article reports, “… media violence makes our kids more aggressive, less patient, and more fearful of the world around them.” (Summary: The Effects of Television). NEED MORE SUPPORT FOR THIS

Tuesday, March 07, 2006

Learning Programs-

Television is full of negative effects on children but it can also have positive effects on them. Learning is a major focus that children’s programs have. Channels like PBS (etc.) are designed to teach children. An article The Good Things About Television says, “Educational programming can develop young children’s socialization and learning skills.” There are television shows out there that are focused on improving young children’s skills and developing their minds. Some of these healthy television programs include Sesame Street, Mr. Rogers’ Neighborhood, Reading Rainbow and Captain Kangaroo (Huston). These programs engage children. They ask questions and perform activities that children at home can get involved with. This keeps children mentally active in what they are watching.

Documentaries-

A documentary can be useful in expanding a child’s mind. Documentary is defined as “depicting news events, social conditions, etc. in non fictional but dramatic form” by Webster’s New World Dictionary. Children can view documentaries and learn about the past. The History Channel may show a documentary that can better help a child understand their history class, because they can now visualize the experience. The Good Things About Television states, “Documentaries can develop critical thinking about society and the world.” Viewing documentaries can be a resourceful way for children to watch television. The programs can broaden their understanding of a situation, while being entertained by the act of watching television.

Monday, March 06, 2006

March 6, 2006

Jason~

You have written a good essay here. I was able to understand most of it. I know nothing about video games; you managed to make it understandable for those who do not have a background in video games. At the moment I am not confused about anything that you have written. I will definitely let you know if I do become confused at any point.

Your purpose was clear. It is discussed briefly in the very beginning and then reinforced at the end of the introduction, and throughout the paper. I understand your purpose to be: Should the government have the right to prohibit certain age groups from purchasing video games? You look at the fact that this seems to be more the parent’s jobs than store owners and the government.

If I understand this correctly you are writing about whether the government should or should not have these restrictions. In your paper you give examples of these restrictions already happening, how video games can help hand eye coordination, and argue that violent acts and video games are not necessarily related. From what I understand you have covered the major points of this subject from the given sides. The key components for your controversy appear to be that there are already rules and regulations in place, but should they be in place? And also is it more the parent’s job to regulate what their children are playing than it is the government and store owners?

You seem very involved with this subject. From your writing I can tell that you are a game player and have your own opinions on the subject but are still able to point out all the details for this controversy. You have put your opinion in this paper, so I am not sure that you are representing all sides fairly in doing this. Otherwise you have presented the information that you have so that another reader could form their own opinion on the subject.

You have referred to this community controversy, but I am not sure that you have really discussed the community. I know the people you are talking about but I am not sure that everyone would. You might want to go back and add this in your introduction. I could see how someone would be confused as to whether parents, or the government, or children, or store owners should be the intended audience. And maybe all of them are. This is just what I have walked away from your paper with.

Your topic sentences look good. They are engaging, good transitions and informative. I believe that your paragraphs are well organized. There is one the bothers me a little. The paragraph that has Dr. Peyser’s example in is seems a little out of place. I love the example you are using, it relates well to the point you are trying to make with your topic. However, I think giving as much detail as you did starts to take away from the paper. Maybe try a different way of stating the example so that it is not as lengthy.

For the content of the paper, I feel like your back up support is sufficient. Your quotes seem to tie into what you are writing about. I do not feel like they were thrown into your paper either. You did not stick to one source for your information, this is good.

You have included your own opinion in this paper, so I feel like that has affected the paper. I understand the position you are taking, and as a reader it makes me interested in knowing more about your side. However, I do not think that you have been overpowering. I might need more information to feel that I was making an informed decision.

This paper was interesting. I enjoyed learning what I did. If there are more examples to be included I think they would help. Otherwise this was a good paper.

Emily Hawkins

Sunday, March 05, 2006

Violence-

“The average American child will witness 200,000 violent acts on television by age 18”

(Gavin, How TV Affects Your Children). Does this scare anyone? Having children view
this outrageous amount of violent acts on television has to have some sort of affect on

them. Children are encouraged to imitate some of these violent acts. After they see it

enough on television they begin to think that they can copy these moves, and in return get

what they want. After all what do we expect when we constantly show someone being

robed, or a bully in school getting their way, without consequences? The violence being

shown a television is also making some kids believe that the world is not safe for them to
live in. (Gavin, How TV Affects Your Children) In agreement with this information

another article reports, “…media violence makes our kids more aggressive, less patient,

and more fearful of the world around them.” (Summary: The Effects of Television). So

with all this information provided, is it still ok for children to be watching television? If

so what are they really getting out of it?

Obesity-

Most children have taken to watching television and playing video games instead of

being active. They spend their time in front of the television instead of outside playing.

Most parents try to set viewing limits for their children to avoid this situation. However it

does not always work. Children find ways to watch television instead of getting up and

being active. “Several studies have documented that even benign television content

decreases children’s creativity and imagination, decreases physical activity, increases

obesity” (Summary: The Effects of Television). Society is growing a generation of couch

potatoes. We give television to our children and stop encouraging them to be active,

causing them to gain weight and even become obese. Some physicians have suggested

that taking televisions out of children’s bedrooms would help some of this problem.

(Gavin, Most Children Exposed to Violent TV at Least Once a Week). Parents must

involve themselves to keep their children from becoming obese.

Saturday, March 04, 2006

Style Lesson 3

This section focuses on actions. The first part focuses on how one should relate their characters to the actions they make. This process relates back to clarity. The section started off with examples from fairy tales then related it to school and work writing. We are told that not all verbs are actions, which is different then what we are taught in school. When nouns are subjects of verbs they are called nominalizations. They generally end with tion, ment, and ence, but are not limited to these endings. This section breaks revision up into three parts, diagnose, analyze, and revise. Under diagnose we are told to ignore introductions and underline the first 7 words or so. Then go and look to see if any abstract nouns have been underlined, and do you “read at least six or seven words before you get to a verb.” (38). Then we move onto analyze. Under this part we are looking for main characters and the actions that these characters take. Then under revise we are supposed to change actions from nominalizations to verbs. Also “make the characters the subjects of those verbs, and rewrite the sentences if they need it. Sometimes using nominalizations works to the writer and reader’s benefits. One key point that is introduced is that a writer has a harder time writing clearly to their audience than they really think. One way to help with this is to “underline the first seven or eight words of every sentence. If you don’t see in those words a character as a subject and a verb as a specific action, you have a candidate for revision” (43). This will help make your writing more understandable to the reader.

Friday, March 03, 2006

Today has been a typical Friday. I had two classes this morning and that was it. I spent this afternoon doing some work and straightening things up. It was very productive. I had dinner with some friends tonight. Then I met up with my sister at six o clock. We hung out for a few and then she came with my friends and I to the girls basketball game. It was great we won by like 20 points. I greatly enjoyed it. After that my roommate and I came back to our room and started a movie. It has been a nice enjoyable day.

Tonight has been hard trying to think of things to write about. I have spent most of these thirty minutes looking at the computer trying to come up with something good to write about. I just don’t have it. All of my ideas have left me. I should be taking the time to edit some paper, or other blog entry but I am not really moved to do that either. It has just been a rough time. I guess this is something I can take and learn from. It seems like the hardest time for me to write is on Friday and Saturday nights. But I like doing my writing like last thing, it kind of closes out my day. Apparently this only works well on the weekdays. On the weekends I think I want to chill so much that writing at the last minute is a forced thing for me. And I don’t want my writing time to be forced. Like it is tonight. And I am just writing to be writing. I guess I can think that at least I am writing. So mental note to self… on the weekends, write before the end of the day. Maybe try doing it in the afternoon. I am assuming that part of taking this class is learning about myself, and my writing. So if I have been able to figure out in a couple of weeks that I cant write on Friday or Saturday nights, I think I am making progress. I mean I can write, I’m doing it right now. It just is not fun, writing is not what it should be right now. So I am going to try and be better about my writing time on the weekends. We will see how that goes. I have learned something in this class. YAY. This is exciting for me. Being able to recognize these things is good. It is a good step in becoming a better writer. Thanks for the awakening.

Thursday, March 02, 2006

I’m not really sure what I want to write about tonight. I kind of would like to try the stream of consciousness for of writing for part of this time. Just because I feel like I have a lot of stuff on my mind. First off, I have a yucky headache. It just hit, right after choir. Now when I get a headache I try to find out what causes it. The only thing that I have come up with is the fact that I had a lousy dinner. Though the angel food cake with strawberries was really good. So my thought is that I have not had enough to eat in the past several hours so now my head hurts. I came back from choir and ate a snack, but I don’t think it is really helping. But it is kinda late to be eating a lot of stuff. I hate eating right before I go to bed. Its not healthy. Speaking of being healthy, I have decided to give up chocolate for Lent. I am on my second day. GO ME! I almost went through all my stuff throwing the chocolate stuff away last night. I gave some to my room mate and the other I am going to take home so my family can have. I hope this really works, cuz it is something I really want to do. I went to the Lent service at Duncan last night. It was really nice. It was small, and comforting. I really walked away with something then. It made me feel good. HAHA my room mate just told someone that the plague was going around school. That is great. There have been so many people out sick lately. (knock on wood) I have not been hit with anything yet. But half of choir has been missing this week. And my close friend here is sick with something, its not strep. I am supposed to go with her tomorrow to get her blood taken so they can test it for other things. Its just craziness. Uhoh a pause…must keep typing…type type type type type more. So this week has been interesting. I feel like it has been stressful, but I m not sure why. I think a lot of things have just been going on. I put in a RA application today. I am excited about that. I think this job would be a great experience. But I’m not really banking on anything. I just feel like it would be good. I am actually kinda sick of the whole college thing. I am ready to be finished. I know im not ready for the real world, but im ready to be finished with school. Maybe being more involved, like with being an RA would make things better. Now I am going to go and get nervous about the interview that I have to do next week for it. I hope that works out. So I got wonderful news this week. Virginia Beach finally announced their summer concert series. So my friend Jennifer, and my sisters and I are going to go. Six concerts in like 5 months. It is going to be amazing. They are all country. And there are going to be plenty of people that I have not seen before. Not that I mind seeing Kenny Chesney for a second time. There are going to be so many attractive people performing. I am just very excited about this. This same group has been before but for some reason it seems more exciting this time. Kjf jfk jkj jfksji iorkn k fj sdjksjf;jklsjf k this is me thinking…… I love these little moments that appear in my writing where I have completely lost my train of thought and therefore have nothing to say. Doing it again…I wonder if my mind could be going so many different ways that I cant focus on one particular thing. I am excited about the basketball game tomorrow. And then I am leaving Saturday to go to Lynchburg. My cousin lives up there and she cuts my hair. She has been for the past like 6 years. So yes I take a two hour drive to get my hair cut. But I know my cousin and completely trust that she would never mess up my hair. So that will take up my day Saturday. Sunday I am going to church in the morning then my family is going to see Lord of the Dance. I think that will be really good. I have seen the little people in Busch Gardens do it, and it was good there. So this better be wonderful. I know it will. And can anyone believe that we have three weeks till spring break? I cant and then I think someone told me that after that we only have 6 weeks left. Is that not insane? This year has just flown by. I cant believe it. Lalalalalalalallalallalalalaallalalalalalaallala. I am trying to think about the things that I seemed to have on my mind at the beginning of this, but they seemed to have all left me. I put pretty pink polkadots uhoh I ran out of p’s. I was going to play with alliteration. The big black bear borrowed my blue butler britches. Humm it would be nice if that made sense. I would be more proud of myself that way. Jfjkdls kslfie fdfdsj skieu. I am trying to think of another letter that would be a good one to use. Maybe T. The tall toothless tuxedo wearing man, took two times to read the story. How about that? It was close. Im not going to be writing any books soon but it works for me. Oh I know something I was thinking about earlier. Everyone is going on spring break. And I am excited about that. My room mate thinks I am weird that I am excited about my friends going on spring break, while I will still be in school. I don’t understand it either. Maybe I was thinking that I would get to see them or something. My friend Jennifer who is going to the concerts with us this summer, I rarely ever see her. We have been talking the last couple of days, so I am hoping that I will be able to catch her, in between her working and me having classes. And then of course there will be people at my church that have been at school all this time. So I am hoping that I will be able to see some of them this weekend when I go home. I guess that is it. It feels really good being able to write like this. I think it is helpful. I feel like I have been able to express myself, in some weird sort of way. YAY!

Wednesday, March 01, 2006

More of the RA application...

1) Please describe any personal characteristics which you possess that make you well qualified to be a Resident Assistant. What skills do you posses and what experiences have you had that might enhance your candidacy for the Resident Assistant position?

I am a life time Girl Scout. I participated in organized troops for 13 years, and still continue to participate actively in the organization. Many of the values and roles that I have been instilled with come from the Girl Scout influence. I have strong leadership skills. I serve on a committee with Girl Scouts that gives me the opportunity to lead people. Once I became an older Girl Scout my troop was in charge of planning activities and leading them for the younger girls. I earned my Gold Award my senior year in high school. Even thought I was working with my best friend, I still was involved with leading people. We did an automotive workshop, so part of my job was to inform the mechanics what we wanted to do, and how it needed to be done. Then I was in charge of leading a safety session for the same project. I needed to be informative and get my point across clearly. The leadership skills that being a Girl Scout have given me are extremely helpful to me.

I also remain very active in my church. I have helped with Vacation Bible School for the past four years. Two of those years I was a co and lead teacher of the youth class. I had to go in and prove to those kids that I was going to be the authority in the class, and make them trust and understand me. Once this was established things went very smoothly. The youth were comfortable with me and we were able to have a good time. I have taken on similar roles in my church for the past several years. When we have children’s functions I am generally in charge of some part of that. I do understand that working with children and working with college students is something very different. I still believe that there are similar ways of dealing with them. Making sure that the group looks to you as a leader is one of the first and key points in this kind of situation. I am sure I would have no problem with this.

I work well with others. I have no problem sharing the role of a leader with a group. Being able to work well with others is very important to me. Otherwise this could create unwanted conflict. I serve on committees at my church. I have to be able to respect other people’s opinions and be able to understand them. I feel that I can handle this very well. Part of being a leader, is being open with other people and being able to work with them.

I am extremely organized. I love to write things down, and keep things looking neat. I work as an office assistant at a day care center, and am constantly straightening things and making sure everything looks organized. I served as the Secretary of my church youth group for several years, this gave me the opportunity to keep records and make sure everything stayed neat. I also served as fund raising chair in high school for my class. I had to be organized to get things done in a timely and orderly fashion.

I have been very active in things that I truly care about. I have acquired many skills in my lifetime that I feel have made me the person that I am. Being a leader, a group member, an organized person, and wanting to help people are all very important characteristics that make up me.